16.06.10 Haiku’s
Rubbing morning eyes
As the daylight’s blues begin
Blinded by the sun
Yawning evening mouth
As the twilight’s sin decays
Haunted by the moon
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The Vivacious Melancholic 
June 16, 2010 at 3:59 pm
The beginning and the end of the day are indeed presented in a melancholy way..well said.
June 17, 2010 at 7:56 pm
Thanks slpmartin
June 16, 2010 at 7:48 pm
love the contrast in the sun and the moon…
June 17, 2010 at 7:57 pm
Glad you enjoyed it!
June 16, 2010 at 8:56 pm
Lovely Haikus. thanks for sharing. Heartspell
June 17, 2010 at 7:58 pm
Thanks for commenting! The VM
June 16, 2010 at 10:17 pm
Very familiar feelings. Lovely indeed. Cheers.
June 17, 2010 at 8:02 pm
Cheers Emmanuel.
June 16, 2010 at 11:40 pm
I can identify with those feelings so well:) Lovely said!
June 17, 2010 at 8:02 pm
Thanks 🙂
June 17, 2010 at 7:34 am
very sense making…
cute poem!
😉
June 17, 2010 at 8:04 pm
Cheers Jingle!
June 17, 2010 at 4:36 pm
nice poem.
June 17, 2010 at 8:06 pm
Thanks!!
June 17, 2010 at 9:34 pm
welcome in,
I will place your link in,
what you need to do is to visit poets to meet the requirement,
keep in mind that return favors to poets who were here yesterday and today..
have fun!
June 17, 2010 at 9:42 pm
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June 18, 2010 at 12:03 am
Awesome haiku.
I love how you can deliver a strong image in so few words.
June 18, 2010 at 12:38 am
Now I am yawning…but not because your poems were boring. They weren’t. But the yawn is catching. Good job!
June 18, 2010 at 12:41 am
too much to drink? 🙂
June 18, 2010 at 4:29 am
Nicely done!
June 18, 2010 at 11:15 am
Please return favors to poets who were here..
Thank you in advance.
😉
June 18, 2010 at 3:18 pm
A fine balance acheived in this pair! Welcome to the Rally–
http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/
June 18, 2010 at 6:52 pm
Lovely haikus
June 18, 2010 at 8:49 pm
very well done!
June 18, 2010 at 9:30 pm
Very nice. I love the juxtaposition of day and night, sun and moon.
June 18, 2010 at 10:40 pm
i like the abrupt twilight at sunrise.
June 19, 2010 at 12:36 am
Kinda makes me want to crawl back in bed
June 19, 2010 at 10:17 am
lyrical. i liked the images as well.
June 19, 2010 at 6:14 pm
just awesome. you painted a pretty painting with your words.
June 19, 2010 at 6:29 pm
Beautifully written.
June 22, 2010 at 1:55 am
awesome haiku:)
June 24, 2010 at 3:19 pm
Oh so lovely! The balance between the 2 verses is superb!
http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/
July 1, 2010 at 5:57 am
wohoho nice..
July 1, 2010 at 1:39 pm
Very clear to imagine your haiku stanzas
July 1, 2010 at 7:21 pm
I always love haikus!!!! nicely-written….
July 1, 2010 at 8:58 pm
As dark as it sounds, it’s marvelous! Yes, there are days when blue is not the color of a cloudless sky, it is the foul mood that manifests. We all have such days. Yes, there are nights when twilight is not just the end of a long exhausting day, but is the beginning of a longer rotting night. We all have such nights.
BEAUTIFUL POEM !!!!!
July 1, 2010 at 11:45 pm
I really like the second one
July 2, 2010 at 10:21 am
Somtimes nature’s rituals are haunting…Thanks for a dear reminder, puts things in perspective. Conrats’ on the awards. Hope Rally days pass pleasantly for you.
July 4, 2010 at 2:42 am
very cool, thanks for sharing
July 5, 2010 at 2:18 am
nice poem:)
July 5, 2010 at 3:28 am
AMAZING! really!
July 5, 2010 at 4:29 pm
Really enjoyed your poem! Thanks for sharing!
July 6, 2010 at 6:06 am
a very visual haiku, lovely 🙂
July 6, 2010 at 10:51 am
You captured the moment very well. 🙂
July 10, 2010 at 6:26 am
nice haiku, very condensed, powerful words!
September 13, 2010 at 4:19 pm
INTENSE.. 🙂
Nice Imagery.. very powerful